The Skull

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She’ll speak to the dead with her head on one side,
Punctuate conversations with the roll of her eyes,
For jokes loose their bite once the dust takes my teeth
And laughter is dry without a tongue or lips and speech.

Watch the cracks for my mind and I have long fell out,
We were in for a while but overdue another bout
Any apologies would be useless in this little war
The maggots will mean the argument is lost for sure.

Once the stone grows too cold she will bore of my grin
But don’t put my skull back where I lie straight and thin
Up here is a sun to bleach the old bones white
And a silver sheen smile beneath the evening starlight

My nerves frayed to cobwebs and caught the last draft
I won’t feel the heat or ice like I did before in a past
With dark empty sockets I’m staring on blind
But it’s better than rotting satin and myself for all time.

But while you perch on my name you may chatter on
Tell me of those who remained after my coffin was gone
If they became neighbours or settled elsewhere?
And have I mentioned, I only died just over there?

 

 


Credits to Ratgirlstudios for her piece ‘Talking With the Dead’

Link to her Tumblr

19 Comments

    1. Thank you very much for the compliment!

      I’ve had a look through a little of your work and you have some fantastic pieces yourself. I loved ‘little bear’ and I can’t wait to see more.

          1. I don’t think this is as strong of a piece because a lot of the descriptions are vague ones, so its like peering into a window but only seeing fog, like the whole picture isn’t there, only bits. If you used more tangible images, like expanded on the human senses, it would be easier for the reader to really feel/see the story play out. I like the rhyme scheme and I think you could make it longer because I like the storytelling in it, I just want a long story. But its good I am left wanting more I think. Does this make sense?

              1. Yes, I forgot. But I think the use of more concrete images, so to speak, would really benefit the piece overall. Anymore you’d like me to look at? I enjoy your poetry.

  1. So macabre, in an almost cheerful sort of way! Nice to see you’re in a good mood.
    I absolutely love the drawing that inspired you 😮

      1. It is certainly wonderful! And oddly enough reading your delightfully dark pieces tends to cheer me up.

          1. I thought you would. And yes, I have! So much poetry! So poetic!Some companion artwork for Hollow Out My Heart, and The Shadow would be great… Hint hint…

            1. Slave driver! I shall do my best, prehaps I shall have some time tomorow, but after that I probably will be painting. Mother has large amounts of redecorating she wants done. But I complain not!

              1. A commendable effort on your part! I may soon following your admirable example in helping with some tiling. I eagerly await your next artistic endeavour.

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