They rattled around the house at all hours of the night. A three AM door slam then hurried whispers and broken plates. You could hear their footsteps from cellar to attic; not a single room was spared their clamour, but she’d be damned if she let them get the best of her.
When she summoned the Reverend, he simply shook his head of perpetually thinning hair and gave a blackened grin.
“I’m afraid this is a little out of my league my dear.” he said. “This is beyond your everyday exorcism. Students are somewhat trickier to evict than ghosts.”
This was cute. I have a long way to wait for this, but I can wait.
Also, did you choose dammed over damned for a reason?
That will be a typo, but thank you for the comment.
A few quibbles: ‘am’ should be ‘AM’, and “she’d be dammed if she let…’ should be ‘she’d be >>damned<>she’d<< let…'
That said, I liked this. I usually don't care for the whole 'last line switcheroo reveal', as it's often overly cutesy or precious or melodramatic (lord knows I used to fall into that trap enough), but here it seems to work. 🙂
I’m glad you think so. I know what you mean about last line reveals and I often try to soften my writing so that the shorter piece don’t include major switches of style.
p.s. I think I messed up my copy/paste… didn’t mean to omit ‘if’ in my second correction.
Loved this; it made me smile. 🙂
Good to know. 😀
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