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Friday Fictioneers (Two Attempts)

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(Copyright for picture: Douglas M. Macllroy) 


The Right Height?

“How high?” he asked.

“High enough.” she replied dropping the rucksack to the ground. “High enough for us. For this.”

“You think so?” He shuffled forward, sending pebbles skittering towards edge.

“Don’t.” she said. “You’ll spoil the surface. We want this to be perfect.”

“Perfect.” he repeated, holding fast where he was. “You want this to be perfect.”

“We want this.” she insisted. “We’re doing this for us. Not me.”

“For us.” he nodded. “Have you got the camera?”

She muttered something and dived into the rucksack, rummaging around until she pulled free the Victorian style camera.

“Ready?” he asked.



In Love We Are Immortal

“Aphrodite.” he called, hands loose at his sides as he saw her standing near the edge once again. You could not see the mortal world from here, but she could pretend that they felt her watching.

“The others are waiting.” he told her. “Artemis and Apollo are already at each other’s throats; we need you to keep the places from going to hell. You know how much Hades creeps me out.”

Aphrodite shook her head.

“I want—”

“You can’t.” he said. “It’s been too long; he wasn’t like us, they weren’t like us!”

“They were mine.” she told him.

“They were mortal.” he replied. “Mortals die.”



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I’m hoping I won’t get in trouble for writing two attempts for this prompt, I wrote the first thjis morning and then the second turned up while I was at work today.

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Carol Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on a poetry collection 'It's All In The Blood'. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands when she can. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poems ‘Sunsets’ and ‘Clear Out‘ were featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers on her site Writing and Works.

10 Comments

  1. summerstommy2 says

    I like them both Carol. I have the same issue so I use a separate blog. They are both engaging takes on the prompt. You write so well I look forward to your posts.

  2. Mystikel says

    I like them both too. The first was kind of tantalizing because you couldn’t quite feel like you were on solid ground with those two. I have met couples like that. I thought the second had a really strong ending and preferred it for that reason.
    Both were intriguing though and left me wanting to hear more.

    I think we can write multiple stories but are supposed to link them separately even if it’s a serial or they’re on the same blog.

    • I’ll hold that in mind for the future and thank you for the lovely comment. I love the comparison of not being on solid ground with the first one.

  3. Dear Carol,

    Nice stories and dialogue on both, although I was completely baffled by the first one. Ah the joys of the 100 word challenge.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. Hi, Carol. I somehow missed you on my journey through the stories, but am back to rectify the situation. The first story is definitely baffling and perhaps it was meant to be that way. They’re both well-written and I liked the second paragraph in the second one with the play on the place going to hell and Hades. 🙂

    janet

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