“This is wrong.” Hannah said, aiming a kick at an especially infuriated column of white cloud.
“I know this is all a shock,” said her Grandmother, “but you will get used to it. We were all surprised by the aneurism, none of your lot saw it coming and even I thought you’d have a month or two more.”
“But this cannot be it!” shrieked Hannah, her voice coming out as a whisper despite her vocal chords straining; why would anyone need the ability to scream where she was? “An eternity of bliss will send me mad; its just too peaceful!”
You’re right!
He never comes at the time we are ready and waiting for him!
And at the start when we do not understand what Eternity means, we still think as an Earthling, too much of anything, even good, it is too much… :)))
Beautiful and vivid twist… somewhat acid as lemon, but good for the soul!
Thank you!
Od Liam
I like the idea of an ‘eternity of bliss being too peaceful’ almost suggests a kind of hell.
Great piece Carol
Thank you.
lol. Love this! I remember when peaceful was maddening.
This is really clever; how total bliss can be a complete nightmare. I guess it’s the infinity of it rather than the small does of bliss we’re used to. Great job here and very well written. xx
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Thank you for the wonderful comment, yours was wonderfully funny.
Wonderful. Heaven is Hell
Let’s hope it is not because I am planning to be there some day.
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