As we sat on the rims of wash basins, you told me of how the one before, the one whose stiletto strut dazzled you into submission had the gall to call you myopic.
The One Before
Published by Carol J Forrester
Carol J Forrester is a writer and a history geek. Her debut collection 'It's All In The Blood' came out November 2019. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands when she can. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poems ‘Sunsets’ and ‘Clear Out‘ were featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon.Her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers on her site Writing and Works. View all posts by Carol J Forrester
Nicely done. Very strong sentence. It pulled me and I wanted to read more. Thank you.
Thank you for the wonderful comment. 😀
Nice work! Great start to a story.
Thank you. 😀
Oh this is excellent. I love that it is all one sentence – and such a powerful one at that.
I’m glad that you enjoyed the piece. 😀
I like the casual way this starts, like a couple of friends chatting over laundry.
It is interesting that you got that image, my initial intention was two slightly tipsy girls sat in the sinks of a nightclub bathroom. Thirty three words doesn’t leave much room for scene setting though I’m afraid.
I’m glad that you enjoyed it though, as long as the writing had an impact.