The One Before

As we sat on the rims of wash basins, you told me of how the one before, the one whose stiletto strut dazzled you into submission had the gall to call you myopic.

 

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8 Comments

  1. Nicely done. Very strong sentence. It pulled me and I wanted to read more. Thank you.

  2. Oh this is excellent. I love that it is all one sentence – and such a powerful one at that.

    1. It is interesting that you got that image, my initial intention was two slightly tipsy girls sat in the sinks of a nightclub bathroom. Thirty three words doesn’t leave much room for scene setting though I’m afraid.
      I’m glad that you enjoyed it though, as long as the writing had an impact.

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