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Morning Encounters

She opened her eyes at the sound of her name and wished, not for the first time that morning, that she was anywhere else then that elevator, in that apartment building.

“Hey Mr James,” she said, doing her best to smile at the elderly teacher standing between the elevator doors. “Whatcha doin’ here?”

“I live here Felicity.” He continued to stand there, taking in the crumpled dress, smeared mascara and stilettos swinging from her left hand.

“Of course you do,” muttered Felicity, shifting uncomfortably and hearing the heels bang into the wall behind her. “Could you, um, press the button?”

 

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Carol J Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on her first novel ‘Darkened Daughter’ and attempting to put together a collection of poetry in the hopes of submitting to publication in 2020. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers here on Writing and Works.

22 Comments

  1. Really good, Carol, and very real. It would be even worse if he happened to have been her teacher as well as just being in the elevator at that time. 🙂

    janet

      • If you specified that in the story, I missed it even with several readings. But it works either way. It was a very realistic story and I could feel her embarrassment.

        • It’s just one of those things I had in my head, I was worried if I put something like “her teacher” it would suggest she was still in school and then I was running with words I didn’t have. *shrugs*
          As you said, works either way.

  2. How embarrassing is right! He’s probably a teacher she has had or has, and now he is going to push the button to let her escape. Wow – good piece and it would be embarrassing! Great job. Nan 🙂

  3. Awkward ;-)Loved the way he is just standing there taking in the whole scene ,lol!Well,next time,she won’t be so careless as getting caught now,would she? :-)Great take on the prompt:-)

  4. Good story with good dialogue. It could have been worse. She could have been a teacher who worked for the same school system as him. That would have “really” been embarassing.

    • I didn’t think of that, but yes, that would be worse. Nothing like seeing someone who’s caught you in an embarrassing position over and over again.

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