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Forest Of Obscurite

The Forest Of Obscurite was dark. Not just dim, or a little gloomy, but dark. Swallowing her pride Tara allowed for Greth to lead the way and kept close, doing her best to stay in the puddle of light from his torch.

“Watch your footing,” he’d warned her. “Nothing like this bitch to send you down cliffs you wouldn’t even know existed till you’re fallin’. She’s a clever one.”

“She?” Tara asked, crouching next to him as he’d checked the horses were tied up properly.

“She,” he’d nodded, checks finished.

“You act like it’s a person.”

“Who said it’s not?”



Carol J Forrester is a writer and a history geek. Her debut collection 'It's All In The Blood' came out November 2019. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands when she can. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poems ‘Sunsets’ and ‘Clear Out‘ were featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon.Her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers on her site Writing and Works.


  1. Carol,
    I like the idea of a sentient forest. That could lead to a whole series of geographical adventures. 🙂 Now, can she be reasoned with though?

    • I’ve actually used characters from one of my novels in this piece. The prompt reminded me that I never finished my ideas for the forest in the book properly and the image Rochelle provided sparked some fantastic imagery in my own mind.

    • Thank you Rochelle, I really enjoyed the prompt and writing something in a world I don’t spend enough time on. The prompt has actually sparked a few ideas, it should keep me in stories for a week at least.

  2. Quite an ambience of dreadful anticipation. Nice work. (Typo in’ you’re footing’.) 😉

    • Thanks for the typo spot, I’ll sort it now, and thank you for the comment. I’m glad that was the feeling you got from the piece.

  3. I like the personification of the forest…reminds me of Mirkwood from JRR Tolkien’s Lord of the Rings. Well done!

  4. A very mysterious and dark tale. I like the subtle under current flowing through the narrative, well done.

    PS In the sentence ‘…Tara allowed for Greth to lead the way…’ you don’t need the ‘for’ and would have had an extra word.

    • Where would I have used it though! Oh my, the endless possibilities.
      Thanks for the advice, I’ll keep it in mind when I write the chapter up. 😀

      • I know, I wasn’t sure if I should mention it, it’s happened to me and I’ve had the sane quandary. 🙂

  5. This is a good story. I loved the phrase you used “puddle of light” and it had a nice twist at the end. You banner is spectacular btw!

    • Thank you, it’s the gate into the old veg garden. Took me ages to settle on that photo.
      I’m glad you enjoyed the story.

    • Thank you, the idea is from one of my first set of ideas for the novel ‘Obscuite’ which then became ‘Darkened Daughter’.

  6. This is excellent Carol, I love this style of story where you are left with a question at the end with so many other questions unanswered. Well done I enjoyed this one very much.

  7. Good story. That’s a place I wouldn’t want to be at night, even in the day. A forest that doesn’t like people is scary. Well done.

    • Thank you, though I’m not sure if I’m going to have it that the forest dislikes all people. Perhaps just most, or perhaps just men.

  8. Excellent story! I love the mysterious, poetic feel to your writing. Your verb tenses were a little confusing, though. Instead of mixing past perfect (he’d warned, he’d checked, he’d nodded) with past (she asked), stick with plain old past (he warned, checked, nodded/she asked). It will place your characters in the same time and make the whole wonderful story more urgent as the reader walks with them through this forest!

    • I’ll keep your advice in mind when I write up the full chapter. Thanks for the comment, I’m glad you enjoyed the style of my writing. 😀

  9. What a thrilling and contemplative story! I can definitely sense her anxiety. Whenever I’m near a steep drop-off, my mind is always flooded with all the ways I could call to my death. And to have nature plotting against her…Whew, not a great situation! Awesome post!

  10. Helena Hann-Basquiat says

    Interesting tale. The picture certainly lends itself to anthropomorphism of the trees. You have a quotation mark at the end of the sentence that ends with the word properly. Shouldn’t be there.

    • Thank you for pointing out the blip, it’s slightly horrifying to think I’ve missed when proofing. I think I might need to get the site an editor.
      *Sigh*, maybe when I actually make money from my writing.

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