Forest Of Obscurite

The Forest Of Obscurite was dark. Not just dim, or a little gloomy, but dark. Swallowing her pride Tara allowed for Greth to lead the way and kept close, doing her best to stay in the puddle of light from his torch.

“Watch your footing,” he’d warned her. “Nothing like this bitch to send you down cliffs you wouldn’t even know existed till you’re fallin’. She’s a clever one.”

“She?” Tara asked, crouching next to him as he’d checked the horses were tied up properly.

“She,” he’d nodded, checks finished.

“You act like it’s a person.”

“Who said it’s not?”



  1. Carol,
    I like the idea of a sentient forest. That could lead to a whole series of geographical adventures. πŸ™‚ Now, can she be reasoned with though?


    1. I’ve actually used characters from one of my novels in this piece. The prompt reminded me that I never finished my ideas for the forest in the book properly and the image Rochelle provided sparked some fantastic imagery in my own mind.


    1. Thank you Rochelle, I really enjoyed the prompt and writing something in a world I don’t spend enough time on. The prompt has actually sparked a few ideas, it should keep me in stories for a week at least.


  2. A very mysterious and dark tale. I like the subtle under current flowing through the narrative, well done.

    PS In the sentence ‘…Tara allowed for Greth to lead the way…’ you don’t need the ‘for’ and would have had an extra word.


  3. This is excellent Carol, I love this style of story where you are left with a question at the end with so many other questions unanswered. Well done I enjoyed this one very much.


  4. Excellent story! I love the mysterious, poetic feel to your writing. Your verb tenses were a little confusing, though. Instead of mixing past perfect (he’d warned, he’d checked, he’d nodded) with past (she asked), stick with plain old past (he warned, checked, nodded/she asked). It will place your characters in the same time and make the whole wonderful story more urgent as the reader walks with them through this forest!


  5. What a thrilling and contemplative story! I can definitely sense her anxiety. Whenever I’m near a steep drop-off, my mind is always flooded with all the ways I could call to my death. And to have nature plotting against her…Whew, not a great situation! Awesome post!


  6. Interesting tale. The picture certainly lends itself to anthropomorphism of the trees. You have a quotation mark at the end of the sentence that ends with the word properly. Shouldn’t be there.


    1. Thank you for pointing out the blip, it’s slightly horrifying to think I’ve missed when proofing. I think I might need to get the site an editor.
      *Sigh*, maybe when I actually make money from my writing.


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