“I was his, well you know, his companion I guess.”
“His companion?”
“Yeah, I kept him out of trouble, gave him someone to talk to, an extra set of hands for shifting luggage about when he was travelling.”
“I still don’t get it.”
“Neither did I, but his sister tried to explain it once, something about needing a person to show you love without being in love with you.”
Hmm. It’s okay, but something about the last sentence is off.
And you can clearly see that it’s the middle of something.
But the middle one seems something like a more helpful sponsor.
Thanks for the comment, I’ll give that sentence another look.
By the way, I recently started a dialogue-only prose magazine.
If you write more dialogue, maybe you could send it over.
http://dialogual.wix.com/dialogual
Thank you, I’ll take a look and keep you in mind next time I’m tapping away at my keyboard.
May I ask though, would a piece written in the same style as https://caroljforrester.wordpress.com/2012/12/02/scholar/ be acceptable, despite only one half of the conversation being defined my speech marks?
Isn’t that First with self-thought?
It was supposed to be between two people but result in the first person becoming the other by the end.
Oh. Well, I see it from the start.
I did a few of these selfies and they’re fun.
And to answer your question, I want people chattering. Like you did here, but complete.
Very nice, and quite interesting – it has a natural feel to it. A very complex story could be written based on those five sentences.
Indeed, I may have to come back to it at a later date. Thanks for the comment.
Carol, I love this. You captured the true meaning of companionship beautifully.
Thank you very much, I’m glad you think so.
Oh, this is beautiful. I love when a story is told entirely in dialogue and you’ve done it perfectly.
Thank you very much. It isn’t a style that I use that often, I tend to think it only really works in shorter pieces. If pure dialogue is something you enjoy perhaps ‘Scholar’ would suit you also:
https://caroljforrester.wordpress.com/2012/12/02/scholar/
This is both thought provoking and somewhat heartbreaking. Well done,
Thank you very much. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
I hope you will visit back. So many 5SF don’t, sadly.