When the night demons come she keeps quiet, tries to sink into the dark drapes around her father’s throne and pretend they don’t see her. It’s stupid of course. She watches as their ivory eyes flicker back and forth, catching in her own gaze momentarily and sending familiar tendrils of cold seeping through her chest.
She almost fainted the first time it happened. Her! Of all people!
She was used to being summoned at strange hours, slipping through the castle corridors as moonlight painted the stones with looming shapes.
Her father warned her to stay close.
“Don’t speak,” he said.
Well written and flows nicely. You say a lot in 100 words! Nice job.
Thank you very much. I’m glad that you think so.
Well done Carol you create a real sense of mystery and suspense. Enjoyed your story.
Thank you! 🙂
Shivery nice Carol.
Thank you. 🙂
🙂
I felt I was behind those drapes and got a real sense of history in this. Lovely.
Thank you very much, I’m so glad you felt like that.
Carol, I love this – great use of the prompt! Atmospheric.
Thank you very much. 🙂
It seemed to fit really well with the characters from a novel I’m writing and I love using them in my flash fictions.
Very atmospheric! You paint the picture well.
Thank you very much Steve.
i love the 100 word stories that leave you wanting more, you packed a lot into that, its really good
Gill x
Thank you very much Gill! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
The piece drew me into it instantly. It’s beautiful….
Thank you very much Gina.
I can see her ‘sink into the dark drapes’. Poor thing. *Shiver*.
I’m glad the imagery came through so vividly. Thank you for the comment. 😀
😀 You are welcome. ~(*_*)~~
You might like to put BEING instead of be …..?
Great story !
Thank you and thanks for pointing out my typo.
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