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Save Yourself [Contains Swearing]

“You didn’t even try to save me!” Amanda gasped, hands clutching her knee-caps as if she’s afraid they may fall off onto the seed-weed strewn floorboards of the cabin at any moment.

“You were fine,” Griffin drawled. He keeps his eyes fixed on the mechanisms of his gun, polish rag dropped in his laps as he tries to find whatever’s jamming. Before she walked in he’s been swearing twelve shades of blue and threatening to feed Jarred to the dogs. Who Jarred was she hadn’t got a clue.

“You left me to drown!” she snapped, voice stronger now she wasn’t spitting up salt-water.

“You were performing what looked like a pretty effective butterfly manoeuvre to me.”

“I was flailing!”

“And wonderfully so!” grinned Griffin.

“Why didn’t you do something?” she demanded. “I could have died and then it would have been on you!”

Griffin shrugged.

“I could have tried to save you I suppose. However, I didn’t want to offend you.”

“Offend me? How the fuck would you saving me from drowning offend me?” she screeched.

Griffin shrugged again.

“Feminist sensibilities,” he answer, grinning as he located the problem with his firearm. “Gottcha you little bastard.”

“What has politics got to do with any of this?” Amanda scowled. “Are you telling me that I’m cold, wet and probably developing some form of bronchial iciness because you didn’t want to appear like a misogynists?”

“Exactly.”

“I was drowning Griffin!”

“Yes, you did mention that already.”

“Drowning!”

Griffin place one finger in his ear and wiggled it around.

“I didn’t want you to think that I thought a woman couldn’t save herself, and look! You even proved that a woman could save herself without male assistance!”

“Griffin.” She stepped closer, closing the space so that she was stood over him and his stupid gun. “I’m going to fucking well kill you one of these days.”

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[Credit for the image and prompt to: http://rajasinsight.com/2014/08/09/inspiration-call-creative-talents-unleashed-69/]

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Carol Forrester is a twenty-three year old writer trying to be a better one. Don’t ask her what her hobbies are because the list doesn’t get much beyond, reading, writing and talking about the same. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University and various poems and stories scattered across the net. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry’s. Most recently, her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and her personal blog Writing and Works hosts a mass of writing from across the last five years. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and is always open to writing more and hosting guest bloggers here on Writing and Works. With hopes of publishing a novel in the next five years and perhaps a collection or two of smaller works, Carol Forrester is nothing if not ambitious. Her writing tries to cover every theme in human life and a lot of her work pulls inspiration from her own eccentric family in the rural wonders of Shropshire life.

5 Comments

  1. The Laughable Cheese says

    Nice! Detailed descriptions, funny, and in my opinion, relevant to today’s issues with men and women.

    • I’m glad you think so, I believe in equality regardless or race, gender or sexual orientation, but these days you seem to get a paranoia with political correctness that almost defeats the point of equality.

      • The Laughable Cheese says

        Lol, I agree. There must be a ‘try too hard to be equal’ factor that makes things go too far in one extreme. And it’s too easy to offend people in cases where no offense was ever meant.

  2. It had a very light narrative tone for a conversation about being left to drown. It felt ‘playful’ to me and I was smiling while I read it.

    Did you notice you shifted between present and past tense in the first two paragraphs?

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