“It’s too cold for this,” Natalia whined, trying to avoid touching the metal arms of the rattan chair. Michael scowled at her.
“Can you at least try to look like you want to be here. I don’t want a repeat of Denmark.”
“We got out alive didn’t we,” Natalia shrugged.
“Only just. You have a way of turning simple into deadly.”
“You’re exaggerating,” she grinned. “Three guys with machine guns, nothing major about that.”
“For you maybe,” Michael snorted. “You forget-”
“Yeah, yeah, I know. You’re a geek, not an operative…”
“We’ve got movement-”
“I mean I don’t- hey wait! Where are you going?”
Copyright-Melanie Greenwood
I really like writing about spies.
Edit: The Follow Up Piece Is Called ‘Sword Play’ and I’ve got a friend who’s drawing it as well! Yay!
Stake out abruptly terminated. Sounds like they’re two of a kind though.
They have more in common then they would like to admit that’s for sure.
I love how we hear the back story through the dialogue – subtly done.
Claire
Thank you Claire.
What an entertaining dialogue with so much background. Nicely done.
Thank you, I’m glad you think so.
What a nice setup for a longer story. Well done!
Thank you. 😀
AnElephant likes spies almost as much as pies.
Well done.
Thank you, spies are a fascinating subject.
It reminds me a little of Get Smart, although there they were both operatives. I guess he’s getting out while he can. 🙂
Maybe.
Spies can be fun. Here’s hoping there isn’t another machine gun in play.
Cheers!
MG
It wouldn’t be good if there was. Thanks for reading.
Dear Carol,
Good dialog and pace. A revealing slice of spies.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you Doug
Dear Carol,
Smooth dialogue. Loved the banter.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you very much Rochelle
Not sure where this came from nor where it’s going, but love the dialogue! Excitement!
Great banter and character for 100 words! You can tell they have a future and some interesting history.
Thank you and I’m glad you think so. I’ve actually just used these characters again because people seem to like them so much.
Fun ending. Makes the reader keep on guessing.
I do like to keep people guessing.
This was well written. I hope you continue with the mission next week.
I may do that.
I give you Sword Play : https://caroljforrester.wordpress.com/2014/10/30/2667/
Entertaining. Pacy and appealing dialogue. I want to know where he’s gone.
Well I did end up following the story up and linked it to the bottom of the post.
I’m glad you found my work entertaining.