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Family Holiday

“Smile!” chorused her parents, grinning themselves as Elaine stood beneath the rusted sign marking this trail as Route Illinois Sixty-Six. Elaine scowled.

How dare they drag her trekking through some stupid American Jungle when everyone else she knew was off to the new Neptune Spa Resort, or Jupiter’s six month musical festival, Fiz Brain.

“Come on sweetie,” her father coaxed. “What’s the matter?”

“Earth,” she spat. “Who even comes here anymore?”

“It’s very popular according to the travel agent,” said her mother.

“With old people” Elaine snapped. “It’s totally lame!”

“Honey-bee, please-”

“No Dad! This sucks. You’re ruining my life!”

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(100 words)

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Carol J Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on her first novel ‘Darkened Daughter’ and attempting to put together a collection of poetry in the hopes of submitting to publication in 2020. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers here on Writing and Works.

26 Comments

  1. Carol, a very different, enjoyable, and all too often true, POV. You could substitute any “undesirable” destination (to young people) and it would work.

    janet

    • Thank you for saying so, I was a little unsure about how it fitted with the flow when I read it back. It’s good to hear that it works for a reader.

  2. Dear Carol.

    Some things never change. Your story picks up steam and is going full speed by the time we reach the last, perfect line. Very well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  3. Dear Carol,

    There’s nothing new under the sun, is there? I enjoyed the idea of interplanetary and the teenager’s whiny voice in this. Clever and imaginative.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Thank you. 😀
      I had a couple of other ideas that for the prompt that were just not working and this was the one that seemed to come together best. It’s nice to see it getting such wonderful comments.

  4. I wonder how many times ‘you’re ruining my life’ is heard by parents. And some parents truly do make a good job of it, in ways much more horrendous than simply taking them to a planet of old people. Nice one!

  5. The parents may be sorry they took their daughter along by the end of that trip. She sounds like she’ll complain the entire trip. Wait until she has kids and is on the other end of the complaints. Good story, Carol, and well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

    • Thank you Suzanne. Indeed, it tends to make for a miserable holiday when one of the holidaymakers doesn’t want to be there. I’ve been quite lucky with family holidays in that my parents always run ideas past my sister and I. In this character’s case though, I just think there will be no pleasing her.

  6. Michael B. Fishman says

    I like sci-fi so I really enjoyed your story. A very fun read!

  7. Ah well.. I for one would have loved having the adventure of going through the jingle ! And hey I’m not THAT old before you get any other ideas, Haha 😀

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