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Rock’n’Roll

You’ve grown older with these years.

Sagged into them, your worn out chair,

too comfortable to discard.

I have too.

Now there are knots in these bones.

A lattice work of knuckle and knobble

and I cannot help you to your feet

propel you across the kitchen sidestep,

kick, flick, turn and lift!

jitterbug us into three am.

I cannot swagger with the same strength

of 1970s rock’n’roll

disco room dance floors.

We are old together it seems.

These feet became stepping stones.

Smaller ones, with laughing mouths

who clutch the knuckles and knobbles

without thought.

We were always old to them.

They are young,

and so very youthful,

and I will show them

how we danced.


This Tuesday’s DVerse Poet’s Pub prompt is a corker! Write a poem from the point of view of someone who’s not your gender. Check the challenge out for yourself and see what the other Pub Poets have in store!

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Carol Forrester is a twenty-three year old writer trying to be a better one. Don’t ask her what her hobbies are because the list doesn’t get much beyond, reading, writing and talking about the same. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University and various poems and stories scattered across the net. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry’s. Most recently, her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and her personal blog Writing and Works hosts a mass of writing from across the last five years. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and is always open to writing more and hosting guest bloggers here on Writing and Works. With hopes of publishing a novel in the next five years and perhaps a collection or two of smaller works, Carol Forrester is nothing if not ambitious. Her writing tries to cover every theme in human life and a lot of her work pulls inspiration from her own eccentric family in the rural wonders of Shropshire life.

27 Comments

  1. Nice telling of the aging together process…from blue jeans to knuckle and knobble…and this could be from either point of view..his or hers. Love still intact.

  2. Glenn Buttkus says

    The POV seems trans or mid-gender, but the message is clarion. Now that so many of us who run with the dVerse dog poets are so long in the tooth, this piece resonates strongly.

    • Thank you for the comment. I really struggling with how to put a male spin on this piece so I just focused on trying not to make it seem too feminine.

  3. I thought this was lovely!! The aging process applies to both genders and there is a perfect example of that in your verse 🙂

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

    • Thank you, I’m really glad you think so. I’ll be honest and say that a lot of the inspiration for this ended up coming from my mother’s parents.

  4. This is very poignant really! I hear his ‘voice’ very clearly! Age manages to catch up with us all.

  5. Show them how you danced, love the aging process of both man and woman ~ I also thought you did well with the “older” voice specially the worn out chair and knots in the bones ~

  6. I think it’s wonderful… I could see/hear my parent’s voices in this, and I think it fits the prompt perfectly. I especially love “these feet became stepping stones” such a strong, telling image.

  7. WeLL.. at 55..
    i SHOW
    tHEm
    how
    to dance
    and can
    prove it
    too.. heHE..
    and it starts
    with the divine
    feminine of grace
    first before man reAlly
    comes
    aLive
    ribs
    and
    ALL..;)

  8. I LOVE the last three lines … so, so, so much.

    Also this:
    “Now there are knots in these bones.
    A lattice work of knuckle and knobble”

  9. I liked this very much. Could definitely relate to it. Yes, we older than 20 somethings still have things we can show and do. I’m still good for a couple of disco tunes! My husband and I do ballroom dancing. We aren’t as sharp as the younglings, but we can still cut up. Excellent write! and I love the background for your website.

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