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The Words [An Ovillejo]

Caught up in this old jumble of paper and ink

I find… I think …

some thought or story half forgotten over time,

words taught to climb

and weave their way through eye and mind

until into the soul they wind

seeking down until depths until that place they find

were they root themselves in thought and breath

and are spoken lastly only unto death.

I find… I think … words taught to climb until into the soul they wind.

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I’m not the biggest fan of form poetry, just because of how restricting it can be and how it can breed bad poetry when the work is forced. I really enjoyed working with the parameters of this form however. It challenged me to really think about what I was writing, which is what I love about dVersePoets and their New Form nights.

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Carol J Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on her first novel ‘Darkened Daughter’ and attempting to put together a collection of poetry in the hopes of submitting to publication in 2020. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers here on Writing and Works.

26 Comments

  1. Carol, your final line, and the fragments that lead to it, are perfection. What a wonderful unwinding.

    You just need to add one more line (Ovillejos are 10 lines).

    It should come between these two lines:

    “until into the soul they wind
    (new line here)
    where they root themselves in thought and breath”

    …and rhyme with “wind,” and be a slightly longer line, like your time/mind/death/breath lines.

    This is a fantastic start, and I love the way it flows. Form-wise, it’s an easy fix. 🙂 Thanks so much for playing! I’m loving what everyone is doing with this great form!

    • Thank you for the comment. I’ve added in the extra line, and thank you for such a detailed explanation, it made it really easy to go back and fix my mistake.

  2. What a beautiful poem, Carol, and tribute to ‘words’ and how they touch us and merge into our souls…breathtaking.

  3. While form can lead to bad poetry, when done right, the strictures of firm can also really inspire some wonderful poetry. You have done a great job with this one.

  4. You did a great job… I agree that forms can be very forced, but done right I think it adds a lot… restrictions is something that in the long run is good for poetry…. but it can also lead you to slaved words.

  5. Words.. iN written
    style.. guideposts..
    furniture..
    rooms..
    iN association
    oF emoTioNs
    true.. no less
    SonG..
    recorded..
    vinyl.. or digital..
    words can guide
    Us back to heARts..
    lost.. language and
    emoTion.. bed
    fellows and
    friends..
    when Art
    and words
    hUman
    become
    heARt
    poe
    Try
    uS..:)

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