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Blue Trellis

 

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Photo Prompt – Copyright Ceayr

 

Lilly had been expecting something more than blue, trellis gates. Beyond them, the compound crept west, the concrete yard broken up by thistles and nettles, bursting out of the cracks and spilling out onto the emptiness. She swallowed and looked at the gates again, imagined something stronger, like steel or iron, tall and spiked.

‘Three, fifteen,’ said the woman beside her. She sucked air through her teeth and tapped at her watch. ‘Your uncle said he would meet us here.’

Lilly nodded and peered past the weeds. She nibbled her lip and then stopped.

Remember, she thought. Just be nice.

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Carol Forrester is a twenty-three year old writer trying to be a better one. Don’t ask her what her hobbies are because the list doesn’t get much beyond, reading, writing and talking about the same. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University and various poems and stories scattered across the net. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry’s. Most recently, her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and her personal blog Writing and Works hosts a mass of writing from across the last five years. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and is always open to writing more and hosting guest bloggers here on Writing and Works. With hopes of publishing a novel in the next five years and perhaps a collection or two of smaller works, Carol Forrester is nothing if not ambitious. Her writing tries to cover every theme in human life and a lot of her work pulls inspiration from her own eccentric family in the rural wonders of Shropshire life.

13 Comments

  1. This is very intriguing. You’ve set up the tension and left me wondering just what’s going on. She wanted ‘steel’ and ‘spikes’ – hmm.

    • Honestly, I was trying to create a scene where Lilly was looking for sanctuary and hoping the compound would be it. I seemed to have put more tension into this piece than I intended.

    • I have no idea if I’m honest and the small inkling I had is much less dark than some of the comments this piece has brought out. 🙂 It’s actually rather amusing.

    • Humiliated? Interesting. That wasn’t what I was thinking when I wrote it but it seems more than a few people have read it that way. Thank you for commenting. 🙂

  2. hmmmm Lily is being escorted by her impatient aunt…..expects stronger, harder gates….and then “nibbles her lip” and reminds herself [in a small voice] “Just be nice.”
    I added the small voice as it’s what I’m hearing between the lines…..is she being “brought” to her uncle? My imagination takes me to where I don’t want it to go! ….and that’s the mark of good writing…right? It gets the reader involved and connecting and imagining on!
    Well done.

  3. Poor Lily, not quite what she expected. I thought as Liz above did, with the girl having found a new home and trying not to be too disappointed. An intriguing story in any case.

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