‘Well you know of course
when you know who closes a door
he always opens a window.’
Except I’ve been eating on too many pizzas,
and I’m not sure the hips puberty gave me
are going to get through that narrow opening
without some serious grazing
and attracting the neighbour’s attention
when he goes looking for the wounded animal
dying over the other side of the fence.
At this point you remind me it’s a metaphor,
that you’re not talking about the bathroom window
above the toilet in Francis? Matthew? Thomas?
Definitely Thomas.
The bathroom window above Thomas’s downstairs loo.
In your eyes there’s no choice but to hike up my knickers
and make the most of where last night got me,
breakfast and all
and perhaps it might turn out
that this window
is less of a window,
and more like a door.
I fancied trying to write something a bit more light hearted tonight. If anyone has any constructive criticism I’d really appreciate it.
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Published by Carol J Forrester
Carol J Forrester is a writer and a history geek. Her debut collection 'It's All In The Blood' came out November 2019.
She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands when she can.
Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poems ‘Sunsets’ and ‘Clear Out‘ were featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon.Her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears.
She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers on her site Writing and Works.
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Oh chuckling I am. Love this personna hiking up her knickers! 🙂 A wonderful take on the prompt. Love the “voice” of it! 🙂
Thank you, I’m really happy to hear that. 🙂
Heehee. I love this! I can see it all, in all its glory.
Haha, I’m glad.
I agree, this is absolutely wonderful 😀
Thank you. 🙂
Great poem and take on the prompt.
Thank you.
there’s no choice but to hike up my knickers… ha, fun one
Thank you. 🙂
I laughed out loud — not some sniveling lol, but the real thing. Glad I’d swallowed my snack before I read this!
Haha, you’ve got no idea how happy your comment just made me. I’m really glad this made you laugh.
The marvel of turning a metaphor into the literal. Love that twist! A fun read 🙂
Thank you.
Your imagery is superb. Yet, must always face the reality of the day… all windows are doors. Nice!
Thank you. Indeed, we must always face reality.
Haha had me giggling 🙂 Just one constructive point of note: defiantly or definitely Thomas? It’s one of those tricky ones that slips through spellcheckers because defiantly is a word, it just means something else.
Damned hips 😉 seriously made life less flexible.
Blast, thank you. I’ve changed it now.
This made me crack up!! Great imagery too!! Loved it!!
Thank you Mukthi, I’m so glad that it’s making people chuckle.
A thoroughly good chuckle.
Thank you. 🙂
Indeed funny. Why do I seem to remember something … ?
Haha, now I want to know what that story was?
🙂
A fabulous story – it had me grinning!
I’m glad, thank you for the comment.
SMiLes.. i’LL
go doubting
Thomas route
iN opTioNaL
goSpel.. aWay
HeRe froM SAint
Francis.. Matthew..
All the rest..
now
Thomas
iS
coR
recT..
makE
best noW
oF aLL
doors
opeN
NoW..
don’t waiT..
WinDow fALLs..:)
LOL A fun romp! 🙂
Haha, I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
Wonderful and a great opportunity for a smile.
Thank you Bjorn.