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Quadrille: Inside Out

You set me off like a spinning top,

round and round,

arms all akimbo and empty jointed

while I spilled secrets like jelly beans.

You swallowed them

until you were full and I was empty,

hollow and aching,

but still

at long, long last.

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I adore these Quadrille Mondays over at dVerse Poets Pub. Today’s prompt is to include the word ‘spill’ in your forty-four word Quadrille. So here is a little fun one to start off the evening and I think I might post a second in a little bit.

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Carol J Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on her first novel ‘Darkened Daughter’ and attempting to put together a collection of poetry in the hopes of submitting to publication in 2020. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers here on Writing and Works.

21 Comments

  1. Oh, Carol. This is perfection:
    “while I spilled secrets like jelly beans.

    You swallowed them” — WONDERFUL.

    So well done.

  2. “until you were full and I was empty,
    hollow and aching,
    but still
    at long, long last.”

    When to the point of trembling from holding the weight of the burden, you cannot help but acknowledge the relief of its release, even if you did not mean to let it go.

  3. “… I spilled secrets like jelly beans.
    You swallowed them
    until you were full and I was empty…”

    Okay, so I wasn’t the first to take note of these lines. That tells you how powerfully well you crafted this section. Great work.

  4. I love your quadrille, Carol, especially the phrase ‘I spilled secrets like jelly beans’!

  5. I love the idea of spinning round and round, and spilling secrets like jelly beans falling out of a candy machine….would that we could put a penny in and learn what someone is thinking — have their thoughts slide right out on a little fortune-cookie-piece of paper! Wouldn’t that be a trick!

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