Our sort, brew confusion in copper topped jars,
somewhere out of sight,
squirrelling away every hurt and sorrow.
It’s not easy to open,
but it explodes well.
Goes off like a landmine under unsuspecting feet,
leaves craters and carnage,
with us standing centre,
unmoved.
So I’m combining two prompts in this poem, the first is Monday’s dVerse Poets’ Pub Quadrille challenge and the second if the daily post’s ‘confusion‘ prompt.
The Quadrille is a great form to use if you want to focus on making an impact with each word you use. There are only forty-four words to use so use them wisely. Click the logo above to check out the prompt and all the other lovely people taking part.
Carol J Forrester - Writing and Works 
I wonder how often we just keep it bottled up…
landmines indeed…
Very much so. Thanks for the comment. 🙂
Whew. Goodness. That was every bit as powerful as its subject matter. An explosion of words intricately placed, and intrinsically laced with (somehow) graceful acid. Whew.
LOVE:
“brew confusion in copper topped jars”
Haha, thank you. That’s the only line that stayed the same through the reworking. I have decided that was the line I wanted in there no matter what.
Excellent. We do store away these word bombs until they can no longer be held in – nice take on the prompt. Very wise
Word bombs, I like that.
🙂
Keeping it all bottled up – it’s such an impressive display when it explodes!
Indeed.
Yes indeed, landmines. Very well done.
Such power even in the brevity of your verse 🙂
Oh. confusion is easy to open, I think. and easy to explode too. There seem to be quite a few experts at that around.
“It’s not easy to open,
but it explodes well.”
Oh indeed it does, excellent take on both prompts.
You have popped mom’s cork once too often. I know this place well. You made my childhood seem to return to life, thanks I think 🙂
I like the landmine description Carol. A good metaphor of the silent storms.
I like your opening line, Carol…not so great to squirrel away all our hurts and sorrows…there’s sure to be explosions!
The two prompts worked very well together…seamless.
We need to detonate those land mines, find a way to spill slowly our grievances. For some it comes easy and others, not at all.
Wow! Lovely piece! ❤
explosive mix of themes here – creating a marvellous melee in such succinct lines
It’s not easy to open,
but it explodes well.
~ah, yes. Most of the times it leaves craters but this way it’s easier to know who’ll choose to stay. 🙂
Oh my — keeping sorrows and disappointments and anger bottled up — until it explodes and hurts those around us. Craters. Oh you’ve written well here —
Bottling stuff up is something I’m very good at. Thanks for commenting. 🙂
Someday, the jar is going to explode a cocktail of mixed feelings.
Indeed.
An ‘Awful Warning’!
It does explode well, doesn’t it?
Most times, at least.
=)
Ah, indeed. I know this well and people who do keep their emotions bottled up. Not only is the explosion toxic, but the weight of the emotions can be debilitating.
It can be. It’s important to learn how to let stuff out without blowing up at those around us.