My chest has drawstrings.
Some days they pull so tight
my lungs cram up into my throat.
They stop words from forming,
keep me from telling you why
I can’t keep my hands still
or quite catch my breath.
They keep me trapped, alone.
Quadrilles are perhaps my favourite form of poetry at the moment. They’re short, sharp, and oh so punchy. Tonight’s prompt from the dVerse Poets Pub is to write a quadrille using the word ‘fear’ as your inspiration. Unfortunately this is a word I have a fair amount of experience with, I’ve let anxiety box me into corners more often than I like to admit.
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That first line is wonderful–chest having drawstrings.
You’ve perfectly captured the feeling of anxiety.
Thank you Sascha. It almost felt freeing to write that line. It can be such a difficult feeling to explain to someone.
I think that line described it perfectly.
Oh, MY. The visual this evokes is simply stunning. STUN.NING. You have perfectly caught this thought. Kudos.
Beautiful!
You have conveyed the feeling so well, Carol, I’m gasping for breath.
Oh no, I didn’t mean to do that!
That’s hauntingly true 😮 wow
Thank you, it’s nice to see you stopping by. 🙂
Of course 😊 that first line strikes such truth though, I love coming across a way of perfectly describing an emotion or feeling that I believed indescribable
Poetry is a great way of putting emotions into words and it’s a great vehicle for working through complicated feelings or trying times. Over the last few years my poetry has defiantly moved towards more personal experiences because of how helpful it has been in working through them.
I love words, love learning new words, but I usually feel at a loss for finding the ones I really want, don’t think I’d be too good at poetry. You do it very well though 😊
Thank you. It’s mostly practice. None of us start out particularly good I don’t think. We have to learn how to fit the words together.
Well written 👍
Thank you.
I loved your piece The Thief. If you don’t mind I’d like to get your thoughts on one of my short stories?
Sure I can have a look at it 😊
Well there’s a few on the site. I’m happy for you to take your pick of whatever grabs your fancy. 🤗
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I also have anxiety issues, and drawstrings tightening around your chest expresses that feeling perfectly! Nicely stated! *hugs*
Hi Traci. Thanks for sharing, it’s good to hear that it’s not just me who has these moments.
You’re definitely not alone. I was officially diagnosed with GAD (generalized anxiety disorder) 18 years ago, but I’d been struggling with it since I was 13 (just turned 52 the other day). I usually describe it as the age-old and overused, “elephant stepping on my chest” but I think I might start using the drawstring analogy. 🙂
Carol, you have definitely created the sensation of fear. Just to clarify, the quadrille posts we toss our there ask for the use of the word fear in the body of the poem. I will do better at clarifying that in the future. That being said, this is a wonderful descriptive poem. I wish I’d thought of it in writing my first novel.
Thank you Victoria, my apologies, I probably didn’t read the instructions carefully enough. I was a little over keen to get stuck in if I’m honest.
Fear makes it difficult to take a deep breath and relax. Good description of that with the drawstrings.
Nice! The last line sums up my daily battle with fear.
I love this poem! It’s so evocative, you have a real talent 🙂
That’s a powerful testimony. I really felt your lack of ease. I hope you have had some relief from it
Ah, don’t we alll have drawstrings tied to our chest? *sigh*
Very creative description of what a tight chest feels like -like someone pulling the drawstrings. Very clever!
What an amazing image! It is exactly the feeling…that constriction of the chest. Well done…you nailed it here!
Fantastic first line- what an image! Nicely done!
Descriptive corset of a poem.
The term drawstrings is apt for overwhelming anxiety. Your poem describes extreme anxiety very well.
The sign of a fine writer is the ability to draw the reader into their world and you did it perfectly. 🙂
Thank you. That’s such a lovely comment to read.
Great use of metaphors!
Thank you.
Incredibly done!
Thank you. It’s nice to see people reading this a couple of days after it was posted. 🙂
What an intense poem! Well done!
Thank you.
Such a visual dipiction of anxiety. One cannot convey it with such accuracy without having experienced it for themselves. Very heart felt and powerful.
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem. 🙂
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You captured the true essence of anxiety by your immaculate usage of words. Having gone through depression myself I sometimes feel sad the way society reacts to people going through depression & anxiety like if a someone is going through a physical problem society may sympathize with that person but the same society sometimes mocks & degrades people going through psychological problems. I mean aren’t the lives of people going through psychological problems as valuable as the lives of someone going through physical problems? Nonetheless, it was a wonderful poem I really admire the fact that you expressed your thoughts regarding anxiety in such a profound way. I too wrote a few poems like “Scars”, “The Knife”, etc to talk about the similar issues on my blog. According to your convenience please do read some of my writings would love to know what you think about them 🙂
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Sidharth
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