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No Oceans In This Shell

I felt your hands on the zip in the hollow of my throat.

Felt you ease it open in one smooth motion,

to reveal the stone inside my rib-cage,

the rice in the rattle,

still pretending to make music

when everyone has stopped listening.

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I’ve started doing judo on a Monday as well as a Wednesday night recently so I was tempted to go straight to bed tonight and leave the poetry for tomorrow. Then I remembered that it was Quadrille night at DVersePoets and decided to put my aching fingers through a little more work just because I didn’t want to miss out on what has become one of my favorite poetry challenges.

Tonight’s word for the forty-four word poem is Zip.

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Carol Forrester is a twenty-four year old writer trying to be a better one. Don’t ask her what her hobbies are because the list doesn’t get much beyond, reading, writing and talking about the same. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University and various poems and stories scattered across the net. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry’s. Most recently, her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and her personal blog Writing and Works hosts a mass of writing from across the last five years. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and is always open to writing more and hosting guest bloggers here on Writing and Works. With hopes of publishing a novel in the next five years and perhaps a collection or two of smaller works, Carol Forrester is nothing if not ambitious. Her writing tries to cover every theme in human life and a lot of her work pulls inspiration from her own eccentric family in the rural wonders of Shropshire life.

16 Comments

  1. Carol, this is, in my humble opinion, simply a perfect poem. So visual. Such crazy awesome images. And a killer last line. Just wonderful.

    The Quadrille is by far one of my favorite poetic challenges, too. So happy you took the time to stop by today. 🙂

  2. Carol, you are so gifted! Everything you write is a stunning show-stopper and this one is no exception. That opening line is beautiful and painful and glorious!

  3. It sounds almost like surgery to me. Heart surgery of course, but the outcome is uncertain. I like the elusive nature of the operator and patient. It leaves us wondering

  4. The title…the first chilling line….the last two lines. This is stunning!!! So very glad you wrote for the prompt.
    I too love the Quadrille — and I believe it’s unique to dVerse.

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