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Heatwave

The Spring was wet,

enough that the trees still look alive above the yellow grass,

their roots searching out hidden wells to keep from losing too many leaves.

In their shade the heat has baked the ground into a bad ceramic,

the glaze already chipped and cracked in this overheated kiln.

Camouflaged by brittle stalks the sacrifices go unnoticed,

dust to dust, ashes to ashes, the trees can only stand so long.

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Carol J Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on her first novel ‘Darkened Daughter’ and attempting to put together a collection of poetry in the hopes of submitting to publication in 2020. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers here on Writing and Works.

23 Comments

  1. These lines
    “In their shade the heat has baked the ground into a bad ceramic,
    the glaze already chipped and cracked in this overheated kiln.” describe so well the effects on the earth of a drought. The image of the bad cracking ceramic in an overheated kiln is perfect!
    And just a quick question….not sure it you mean to say “trees” or “tress” in that last line….I am reminded of the leafy branches of the trees almost as the earth’s tresses. I like it either way.

  2. Nice line: “Camouflaged by brittle stalks the sacrifices go unnoticed” It emphasizes the struggle through the arid conditions.

  3. Glenn Buttkus says

    Again, Lillian was here first to grab my favorite line & image. There is a freshness in your work that is very appealing, effortlessly poetic. One thing for sure–there’s no drought out here on the trail.

  4. Roots Withstanding
    So Much Pain
    Buried
    From all to
    See Never the
    More Roots Do Sing
    Numb in Dance Go Lost
    Trees
    Fall DowN
    Water ComeS AGAiN..:)

  5. Luckily we have some Rain these days but i know of that kind of drought. Luv the “bad ceramic” image

    much love…

  6. What a way to start this poem, with a short statement that sets the scene and then describes trees in such glorious detail. I especially enjoyed:
    ‘In their shade the heat has baked the ground into a bad ceramic,
    the glaze already chipped and cracked in this overheated kiln’.

  7. Oh, the sacrifice is so well denoted in your verse. We see the green and feel the heat but it is on the ground and within where the struggle for survival goes on. I have seen those cracks
    and believed in them. It’s from “dust to dust and ashes to ashes” that a life reaches its end.
    -HA

  8. Wow! Really captures the rain and then the heatwave. The brittleness and use of ceramic really seems to show how hard and dried out the earth is but you describe the trees and their roots so well, searching out deep below for water.

  9. Sacrifice often does go unnoticed, when it does get noticed it is suspected of being mere theatre. I have a soft spot for trees. They need good Forresters.

  10. You capture that desperate feeling of the vegetation in a drought- love the use of the word sacrifice and the image of the chipping earth.

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