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Down In The Dust – #FridayFictioneers

‘There’s never much green out here is there?’ said Bobby, reaching out to pinch the thorn end of a twig. The bush had rooted into one of the fissures running along the face of the valley and Bobby could see its thin, grey roots spidering outwards in tendrils.  

He twisted his hand and the twig crumbled.

‘Sorry,’ he muttered and dusted the debris away.  

He turned and walked the fifty yards back to his car.

The boot was still open, the spade inside.

‘I should have found somewhere nicer,’ he muttered, gripping the handle. ‘You would have preferred somewhere green.’


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Carol Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on a poetry collection 'It's All In The Blood'. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands when she can. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poems ‘Sunsets’ and ‘Clear Out‘ were featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers on her site Writing and Works.

29 Comments

    • Thank you Iain. I do worry sometimes with the number of stories I write that end or start with graves… perhaps it’s a sign I should be trying to write a longer one.

      • I’m guilty of this too, as are a lot of Friday Fictioneers – I think you’re right, in such a short number of words, it’s a quick way to make an impact.

        • That and I think my brain has a switch that says ‘Nope, too bland, too happy, let’s chuck some death and possible murder in there before people think you’ve turned soft.’
          However, I do have the seeds of a short story about a leprechaun who can turn any liquid to whiskey that I’m think of writing next and that involves no graves. (So far as I can tell). It does involve a lot of bad whiskey though.

  1. That he killed her but cared enough to think that he should have dug her grave elsewhere… hmmm… a killer with a heart?

  2. Abhijit Ray says

    It would probably not matter anymore. Green or no green, the person is gone.

  3. I think the killer is a psycho…he killed her in cold blood and now thinks of burying her in a place of her liking.

  4. I’m picturing an accidental killing of Bobby’s dog, maybe he went shopping and left the window closed and the dog suffocated. Bobby feels awful and to appease his conscience rushes to bury the dog.
    Its a very evocative piece and I like it!

    • Good point, and digging a grave takes quite a bit of effort. I mean if you think about how much effort goes into digging potatoes into the ground compared with the depth you’d need for a body.

  5. gahlearner says

    A good place to hide a body. I laughed about your comments of not wanting to write too happy. I always have to force myself to write something darkish. 😀

    • I’m the opposite. I find the happy always feels forced. I’m more aware of that tonight as I’m trying to curate a collection of poems. My god I’m dark sometime. 8(

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