Down In The Dust – #FridayFictioneers

‘There’s never much green out here is there?’ said Bobby, reaching out to pinch the thorn end of a twig. The bush had rooted into one of the fissures running along the face of the valley and Bobby could see its thin, grey roots spidering outwards in tendrils.  

He twisted his hand and the twig crumbled.

‘Sorry,’ he muttered and dusted the debris away.  

He turned and walked the fifty yards back to his car.

The boot was still open, the spade inside.

‘I should have found somewhere nicer,’ he muttered, gripping the handle. ‘You would have preferred somewhere green.’


PHOTO PROMPT © Russell Gayer

29 Comments

      1. I’m guilty of this too, as are a lot of Friday Fictioneers – I think you’re right, in such a short number of words, it’s a quick way to make an impact.

        1. That and I think my brain has a switch that says ‘Nope, too bland, too happy, let’s chuck some death and possible murder in there before people think you’ve turned soft.’
          However, I do have the seeds of a short story about a leprechaun who can turn any liquid to whiskey that I’m think of writing next and that involves no graves. (So far as I can tell). It does involve a lot of bad whiskey though.

          1. After a few stories that feature death I always set myself a challenge to go a week or so without killing anyone off – but it gets difficult. Maybe leprechauns is the answer! 🙂

  1. That he killed her but cared enough to think that he should have dug her grave elsewhere… hmmm… a killer with a heart?

        1. Yes there are and I wouldn’t call myself a light writer if I’m honest. I do like this piece because it could be expanded and taken a number of different ways. Nothing wrong with dark though.

  2. I’m picturing an accidental killing of Bobby’s dog, maybe he went shopping and left the window closed and the dog suffocated. Bobby feels awful and to appease his conscience rushes to bury the dog.
    Its a very evocative piece and I like it!

    1. Good point, and digging a grave takes quite a bit of effort. I mean if you think about how much effort goes into digging potatoes into the ground compared with the depth you’d need for a body.

  3. A good place to hide a body. I laughed about your comments of not wanting to write too happy. I always have to force myself to write something darkish. 😀

    1. I’m the opposite. I find the happy always feels forced. I’m more aware of that tonight as I’m trying to curate a collection of poems. My god I’m dark sometime. 8(

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