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Tongue And Cheek

The slow, relaxed kisses,

often led to something else

less slow, less relaxed,

less clothed

more time consuming,

all consuming.

While the sharp, sweet pecks

always on the way past

like commas in conversation,

were the pauses for breath

anchoring us to each other.

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Carol J Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on her first novel ‘Darkened Daughter’ and attempting to put together a collection of poetry in the hopes of submitting to publication in 2020. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers here on Writing and Works.

45 Comments

    • Thank you. I was trying to write a ‘romantic’ poem earlier for the Cupid’s Arrow competition but it didn’t work out the way I wanted. This ended up being far closer to the style of poem I wanted to write. Lovely prompt.

  1. Glenn Buttkus says

    Kissing can be a prelude or a farewell. Isn’t it grand that kisses get the juices running and the engines revving? Your sensual poem was titillating, yet prudent.

  2. You say so much about the relationship by describing the kisses. I especially like,
    “sweet pecks…
    like commas in conversation,
    were the pauses for breath
    anchoring us to each other.
    It is interesting these quick kisses are the foundation of the relationship. Rings true.
    Great poem.

    • Thank you Ali. I think all the comments have come back to the same line which is amazing. As I said to Sarah, passion is good, but it’s not a stable foundation.

      • I love hearing the words and/or lines that resonate with readers. It is interesting when many choose the same part of the poem isn’t it.

    • Thank you Sarah. You’re right about those pecks being important. Passion is good, but if you only have passions, relationships tend to burn fast and quick.

  3. Kisses as commas, the familiar and the safe. I like that idea, it’s like stitching, the undramatic framework that holds a relationship together.

  4. gypsy moon says

    “While the sharp, sweet pecks
    always on the way past
    like commas in conversation”

    Wow, that is so cool.

  5. I love the wordplay in the title, Carol, the gentle brush strokes of detail and the progression, especially in the lines:
    ‘less clothed
    more time consuming,
    all consuming’
    and those pecks ‘like commas in conversation’, Stunning!

  6. Ah, I love how the title matches the tone here — those “commas in conversation” and something “less slow, less relaxed/less clothed” make for a wonderful word-play. Very judicious use of 44 words! 🙂

  7. LOVE the title…..and its play on words here. And then the comparison of the quick sweet pecks to commas….delightful!

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