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Find A Room, Make Yourself At Home

All corridors run back to you,

though they say loss gets less

the longer you let it sit.

And you’ve been sitting here,

in this hollow you left for a while now

Just a slither of yourself

with no new words to say

that might explain this empty.

And barricades don’t keep

the door from banging open,

every time a storm

or gentle breeze blows in.

It only takes a name,

or a memory,

to raise your shade.

So I given up airing out this room

with all your secrets.

Leave another hole in the wall

the same shape as my fist,

pretend I haven’t

when the moments leaves.

Re-watch you walk in

sit down

pick up your drink.

Re-watch you pick up your drink.

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Carol J Forrester is a writer and a history geek. Her debut collection 'It's All In The Blood' came out November 2019. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands when she can. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poems ‘Sunsets’ and ‘Clear Out‘ were featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon.Her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers on her site Writing and Works.

13 Comments

  1. Your poem resonates with me, Carol. I’ve got a shadow that lurks as well.
    Favorite lines:
    “Just a slither of yourself
    with no new words to say
    that might explain this empty.”

    “It only takes a name,
    or a memory,
    to raise your shade.”

  2. Glenn A. Buttkus says

    There seems to be a novella peeked at, and hinted at between the lines; the mark of clever writing, leaving us curious, wanting more.

  3. Beverly Crawford says

    Some rooms are best left not visited. You conveyed the darkness well.

  4. I like the thought of airing out the room of the secrets and how “loss gets less
    the longer you let it sit”.

  5. Your poem is haunting, Carol, and the wistful and dark undertones struggle with each other to evoke both uneasiness and longing. The corridors made me feel uncomfortable, I don’t like corridors, they remind me of nightmares, hotels, hospitals, and my mother’s care home where she walked up and down one most of the time. The lines that poked at my heart are:
    ‘…you’ve been sitting here,
    in this hollow you left for a while now
    Just a slither of yourself
    with no new words to say
    that might explain this empty’
    and
    ‘It only takes a name,
    or a memory,
    to raise your shade’.
    It’s left me very unsettled, which shows how well-written it is.

  6. powerful imprints in this poem – not least the fist in the wall, “this hollow you left for a while now”
    thank you for joining in with the prompt with this excellent poem of a literal and metaphorical room

  7. All of this, but especially this one line, has a lot of weight:

    “pretend I haven’t / when the moments leaves.”

  8. For me, this is powerful, haunting, and disturbing. There seems to be a backstory here….somewhat hidden…like the secrets and the fist through the wall. The door banging open every time there’s a storm….ghost? Or he actually returns….disrupts?

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