September Evening #DVersePoetic

Summer has left the door outside open,

is drinking mulled wine on the patio,

leaving petals by her feet one by one.

Too focused on the sun’s slow set to notice

exchanging looks and Night’s arrival

its cloak across its shoulders slipping,

gold stars sewn like seeds on soil,

for Summer’s goose-pricked shoulders

brass tanned and shivering.

There were a few options for last night’s DVerse Poets ‘Poetics’ Prompt. I chose to write a poem by taking one of the lines provided (Summer is leaving too exchanging its gold for brass) and using each word as the starting word for each line of my own poem. The last two lines were the trickiest to finalise, but after a bit of playing around I managed to come up with a piece that I was happy enough to post.


  1. what a lovely personification of late summer and good use of Lawrenson’s line from “September”
    I especially was taken by this:
    “exchanging looks and Night’s arrival”

  2. “exchanging looks and Night’s arrival” – I like how this hints at an interaction between day and night, or one between the seasons, and how closely each pair is associated, with “its cloak across its shoulders slipping.”

  3. I enjoyed your personification of summer, Carol, especially those ‘goose-pricked shoulders / brass tanned and shivering’. Yes, it’s already cooling down.

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