Summer has left the door outside open,
is drinking mulled wine on the patio,
leaving petals by her feet one by one.
Too focused on the sun’s slow set to notice
exchanging looks and Night’s arrival
its cloak across its shoulders slipping,
gold stars sewn like seeds on soil,
for Summer’s goose-pricked shoulders
brass tanned and shivering.
There were a few options for last night’s DVerse Poets ‘Poetics’ Prompt. I chose to write a poem by taking one of the lines provided (Summer is leaving too exchanging its gold for brass) and using each word as the starting word for each line of my own poem. The last two lines were the trickiest to finalise, but after a bit of playing around I managed to come up with a piece that I was happy enough to post.
Carol J Forrester 
what a lovely personification of late summer and good use of Lawrenson’s line from “September”
I especially was taken by this:
“exchanging looks and Night’s arrival”
“exchanging looks and Night’s arrival” – I like how this hints at an interaction between day and night, or one between the seasons, and how closely each pair is associated, with “its cloak across its shoulders slipping.”
I think this is one of the most lovely responses to Laura’s challenge…..sigh.
I think so, too.
MAGNIFICENT personification of summer as she encounters the beginning of Autumn!
Yes, I can see Summer sipping her mulled wine on patio with goose-pricked shoulders, shivering…a fabulous write, Carol!
I love how you let summer be heard, and I really can see her with
goose-pricked shoulders
brass tanned and shivering.
I enjoyed your personification of summer, Carol, especially those ‘goose-pricked shoulders / brass tanned and shivering’. Yes, it’s already cooling down.
Summer as a woman feeling the early chill of autumn at the season’s passing is a beautiful image.