Down To Dregs – A Poem By Carol J Forrester

I find enough dregs in this coffee cup
to stay past closing,
beyond the last click of the latch catching
and the solid drone of the dishwasher ending
the soft clink, clink, clink of glasses settling
back into their neat, tidy shelves.

We listen to the distant dissonant clamour
of other lingering loiterers,
drifting through honeyed darkness,
a slow breath seeping
out, out, out,
like a last.

My own chest filled with gurgle, and cackle,
a sunken, sodden conversation
I dread to dredge up.
Embellish the quiet with a sudden, empty sigh
your own tense shoulders easing
when I finally chose the word goodnight.

1. Write a SOUND POEM which includes AT LEAST ONE from EACH of the FIVE HEARING CATEGORY SELECTIONS below: (reference the hearing words you chose in your post).

  • bellow; clink; drone; jingle; quiver;
  • clamour; dissonant; rip-roaring; tempestuous; vociferous;
  • dulcet: honeyed; poetic; sonorous; tonal;
  • blabber; cackle; dribble; gurgle; seethe;
  • beseech; chant; drawl; embellish; intone

Feel free to dip deeper into your chosen words by elaborating further from the Thesaurus with synonyms and antonyms

39 Comments

    1. Thank you Bjorn. The ending was probably the trickiest part as I spent ages trying to work out how to use a word from that last line of options. It didn’t even occur to me until afterwards that I didn’t have to use them in order.

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  1. really enjoyed reading this poem, several times! you have some sensational sounds in addition to the word choice “the soft clink, clink, clink of glasses settling”- and the mood that ripples, murmurs and sighs beneath all the externals

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    1. Thank you Laura. For some reason the prompt words brought up a really clear memory of a café where I used to go for poetry evenings, so I had a bit of fun creating a little story with that.

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  2. You put ,me in mind of the t50’s and all night diners, like a slice out of a novel, it breathes between the lines, implying and teasing, making the reader want more.

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  3. This is gorgeously rendered! I especially admire; “The distant dissonant clamour of other lingering loiterers, drifting through honeyed darkness, a slow breath seeping out, out, out, like a last.” 💝💝

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    1. Pretty much. I used to go to a poetry event that took place in a coffee shop in the evenings, when the rest of the Highstreet was closed. It was a strange contrast of life and sleep.

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  4. This was so engaging, I could feel the awareness of place and the reluctance — do well written Carol.

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  5. It was like sitting beside you in this space, with careful and vivid were the sounds you selected. Must say my favorite use of the words is how you “embellish the quiet” an inspiring line.

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    1. Thank you. I have to admit that the word embellish had be stuck for a while, I was convinced it didn’t quite slot into the poem and spent ages moving it around. It ended up in the first place I put it. 🙄

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  6. Carol what a strong scene, and captured with perfectly described realism…poetry at this level is just stunning….the words in my comment are just tumbling out in disorder cause I’m still a bit numbed. And that is simply true.

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  7. I love the sounds of this poem, Carol, especially: ‘ distant dissonant clamour
    of other lingering loiterers,’ – alliterative heaven 🙂

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  8. Soooo many fabulous sounds in this poem! I read it a second time, aloud. Wonderful. It sizzles with sounds 🙂
    Smitten with this line:
    “beyond the last click of the latch catching”
    Are you coming to dVerse LIVE today? Go to dVerse main site and find the link to join us. Would LOVE to have you read this aloud for the group! We’re LIVE from 3 to 4 PM today….and if it lasts a little longer, there’s a second link to click on at 4 PM.
    Just go to dVerse at 3 today, or between 3 and 4 today (Eastern time – Boston time) and you’ll find the easy directions and link to join us live.

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