I felt your hands on the zip in the hollow of my throat.
Felt you ease it open in one smooth motion,
to reveal the stone inside my rib-cage,
the rice in the rattle,
still pretending to make music
when everyone has stopped listening.
I’ve started doing judo on a Monday as well as a Wednesday night recently so I was tempted to go straight to bed tonight and leave the poetry for tomorrow. Then I remembered that it was Quadrille night at DVersePoets and decided to put my aching fingers through a little more work just because I didn’t want to miss out on what has become one of my favorite poetry challenges.
Tonight’s word for the forty-four word poem is Zip.
Carol J Forrester 
Carol, this is, in my humble opinion, simply a perfect poem. So visual. Such crazy awesome images. And a killer last line. Just wonderful.
The Quadrille is by far one of my favorite poetic challenges, too. So happy you took the time to stop by today. 🙂
Thank you so much, it’s so lovely to hear such wonderful compliments. 😊
Whew! This is AWESOME!!! You killed this.
And I am listening.
Thank you I’m glad you liked it
Nothing worse than pretending. Beautifully written.
You’re very correct. Thanks for commenting
Carol, you are so gifted! Everything you write is a stunning show-stopper and this one is no exception. That opening line is beautiful and painful and glorious!
Thank you so much, I’m not sure that everything I write is a show stopper but I do appreciate the compliment
Wow, such imagery in this piece. Well written. Thanks for sharing. 🙂
It sounds almost like surgery to me. Heart surgery of course, but the outcome is uncertain. I like the elusive nature of the operator and patient. It leaves us wondering
Judo, eh? What’s that like??
It’s really good fun. I’ve been doing it for just under two years.
Must be fun for you to be so committed! Cheers!
Loved the stone heart and the rice in the rattle… Heavy duty for sure! Great imagery.
Dwight
Thank you Dwight
The title…the first chilling line….the last two lines. This is stunning!!! So very glad you wrote for the prompt.
I too love the Quadrille — and I believe it’s unique to dVerse.