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Turn To Stone #DVersePoets #TuesdayPoetics

I gathered the stones myself,

stacked them before you

like a temple offering,

my skin the sacrifice

as I bared it inch by inch

and asked for a blessing

you denied me

until the pile was fragments

and my flesh peppered

with your approval.

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Carol J Forrester is a writer trying to be a better one. She’s currently working on her first novel ‘Darkened Daughter’ and attempting to put together a collection of poetry in the hopes of submitting to publication in 2020. She has a 2:1 BA degree in history from Bath Spa University, enjoys judo at least twice a week, and tries to attend poetry events around the Midlands. Her flash fiction story ‘Glorious Silence’ was named as River Ram Press’ short story of the month for August 2014 and her short story ‘A Visit From The Fortune Teller’ has been showcased on the literary site Ink Pantry. Her poem ‘Sunsets’ was featured on Eyes Plus Words, and two of her poems were included in the DVerse Poets Pub Publication ‘Chiaroscuro’ which is available for purchase on amazon. More recently her poem ‘Until The Light Gets In‘ was accepted and published at The Drabble and her poem ‘Newborn’ was published by Ink Sweat & Tears. She has been lucky enough to write guest posts for sites such as Inky Tavern and Song of The Forlorn and has hosted a number of guest bloggers here on Writing and Works.

22 Comments

  1. Turn to Stone……the prompt lies in the title and is carried through under very dire circumstances in the poem — if I’m reading it correctly. The stones piled in offering….a blessing denied…..and then “my flesh peppered with your approval.” Is s/he stoned in the end and that body, now bruised from the stones, is one the pleaed-to individual can subjugate and accept? A very dark ending………so very well written.
    And if I’ve interpreted far astray from your meaning…apologies…but then I’ve always thought that the mark of a good writer who can make the reader have a visceral response…as in filling in the story in this case.

    • You’re pretty much dead on with your interpretation, though you’ve gone a little deeper perhaps, but the point of poetry is often to take the poem further.

  2. Beverly Crawford says

    Sadly, what happens if we allow others to define us.

  3. This seems to me to be running with the biblical theme, one of the tried and trusted themes of women accepting their punishment just for being women.

      • Ooh, you’ve made my evening! I read so many poems where I haven’t got a clue what the poet is on about except trying to look clever, it’s nice to read a poem of a less than hitting-you- between-the-eyes-with-a-poleaxe evidence that repays careful reading.

        • Haha, glad I could make you’re evening. I do try to avoid the poleaxe, but being clever for the sake of being clever doesn’t benefit anyone.

          • It used to make me feel lacking or stupid, but on the whole I think I’m intelligent enough to read poetry and understand it…if there’s anything to understand.

              • A lot of the stuff in poetry journals, experimental or ‘utterly mindblowing’ type stuff, just doesn’t make sense. It might ramble all over the page and have random capitalised words or big gaps between them, but it still doesn’t make sense. It’s tiring.

                  • If you can’t remember a single line or a single image from a poem when you’ve read it a couple of times, there’s something not quite right in my book.

  4. Glenn Buttkus says

    When I think of the fate of women under the heel of Islam, I shake with fury. Me too, indeed “punished for just being a woman”. But sadly we live in the Land of Blame, where civil rights and feminist causes makes being male and white less than admirable.

    • Stoning also appears in the bible, and Islam itself is not necessarily the issue, just some interpretations. Just as some interpretations of Christianity can be harmful. If you read the bible women get a tough deal pretty much the whole way through.

  5. It’s a painful read. To revere someone/something and give offerings, only to have them turned into weapons to wound the giver 😦

  6. I like this one! The gathering of stones for approval and the letting go and finding approval in the loss! Nice!

  7. I see you went with the quadrille too, Carol, and yours has stoned me into wakefulness this rainy morning. We women provide the ammunition without realising and men seem quite happy to punish us for something over which we have no control. I blame it on religion, historically the male domain.

  8. Why must we be such “people pleasers”?! Co-dependency gives the other too much power but I cannot cast the first stone…

  9. A dark telling, of an ethos that, sadly, remains unchanged. Visceral and real, with such a contrast between the yearning tone of the narrator and the utter, apathetic silence of the one whom the narrator addresses. Chilling and heartbreaking!

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