Fingertips perched as light as sparrow feet on the branches of your shoulders, snow could settle in your stillness if it weren’t so cold. Instead clouds build beneath us a bed of air and ice that a single shiver would be enough to break.
You’ve captured a fragile relationship with your words.
These first two lines really drew me in,
“Fingertips perched as light as sparrow feet
on the branches of your shoulders,”
Those first two lines are magical. “a bed of air and ice” of that Ice Queen is a most fragile creation and beautifully described but perhaps not that welcoming to a warm-blooded human.
The clouds building beneath… what a frosty relationship you paint…
Nice poem actually 🥰
A frosty relationship but one that shivers and simmers and can erupt in love.
Or just one kind word, or a hand placed over the other….yes. Very nice.
Ain said it best, so I’ll just second that!
Wonderful metaphor. Those last lines are absolutely perfect!
The figurative language in the first 2 lines is amazing. ❤
Thank you
Nice poem.
Thank you
You’ve captured a fragile relationship with your words.
These first two lines really drew me in,
“Fingertips perched as light as sparrow feet
on the branches of your shoulders,”
I knew I wanted to use those two lines, the rest of the poem was built around them so I could keep them.
Bravo!
A nice poem,picturing a frail relationship….or can it be a budding one? 😉
Ah, there in lies the question
You had me at ‘fingertips’, Carol – I was just pulled in!
❤
David
Surprisingly strong grip in those fingertips
Those first two lines are magical. “a bed of air and ice” of that Ice Queen is a most fragile creation and beautifully described but perhaps not that welcoming to a warm-blooded human.
Thank you, I’m so glad to hear you found magic in the poem. 🙂
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I can feel the tension of the ice about to shatter!
Thank you Ingrid.
Nice one