The slow, relaxed kisses,
often led to something else
less slow, less relaxed,
less clothed
more time consuming,
all consuming.
While the sharp, sweet pecks
always on the way past
like commas in conversation,
were the pauses for breath
anchoring us to each other.
Carol J Forrester 
Oh, MY. So good, Carol. This is so sensual, and the pacing is perfection.
Love those “commas in conversation,” especially.
Thank you. I was trying to write a ‘romantic’ poem earlier for the Cupid’s Arrow competition but it didn’t work out the way I wanted. This ended up being far closer to the style of poem I wanted to write. Lovely prompt.
less clothed… Love how you moved from the kiss to more.
commas in the conversation… what a great phrase
Thank you Bjorn. There seems to have been a fantastic selection of turns of phrases tonight.
Kissing can be a prelude or a farewell. Isn’t it grand that kisses get the juices running and the engines revving? Your sensual poem was titillating, yet prudent.
I don’t think those two words have ever been used in reference to the same thing before Glenn. I do love it when you comment.
Each with a way to spark something within us.
Indeed. 😀
You say so much about the relationship by describing the kisses. I especially like,
“sweet pecks…
like commas in conversation,
were the pauses for breath
anchoring us to each other.
It is interesting these quick kisses are the foundation of the relationship. Rings true.
Great poem.
Thank you Ali. I think all the comments have come back to the same line which is amazing. As I said to Sarah, passion is good, but it’s not a stable foundation.
I love hearing the words and/or lines that resonate with readers. It is interesting when many choose the same part of the poem isn’t it.
I like the contrast between the kisses – and the power of those quick pecks, surprisingly important. The turn around works very well.
Thank you Sarah. You’re right about those pecks being important. Passion is good, but if you only have passions, relationships tend to burn fast and quick.
Wonderful–especially those final three lines, “like commas in conversation.” You say so much about a relationship here.
Thank you, I’m glad you think so.
Kisses as commas, the familiar and the safe. I like that idea, it’s like stitching, the undramatic framework that holds a relationship together.
Beautifully put.
🙂
Hot.Hot.Hot!
Haha, well I have got form for steamy quadrilles.
“While the sharp, sweet pecks
always on the way past
like commas in conversation”
Wow, that is so cool.
Thank you, I’m glad you think so.
Wonderful, Carol. I love the appreciation for the pecks in passing as well as the passionate kisses.
Thank you Diana. I think they sometimes get overlooked in love poems.
i like the balance of your poem, between passion and love. nicely done
Thank you very much.
You are welcome.
I like the “time consuming, all consuming” in contrast to the “sharp, sweet pecks”.
Thank you Maggie.
Great quadrille. I like your description of kisses like commas. Very creative.
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem.
Oh my Carol, such a wonderful sensuous poem. Kisses like commas, that’s cool…!
Thank you Rob. I always get a little nervous posting the more sensual ones. It’s a little tricky to judge how they will go down.
I love the wordplay in the title, Carol, the gentle brush strokes of detail and the progression, especially in the lines:
‘less clothed
more time consuming,
all consuming’
and those pecks ‘like commas in conversation’, Stunning!
Thank you Kim. I’m so glad this one has gone down so well. 😀
😊
Love the contrasting kisses in this piece! 🙂
Thank you Maria. I wanted to try and capture more than one aspect of a relationship.
Ah, I love how the title matches the tone here — those “commas in conversation” and something “less slow, less relaxed/less clothed” make for a wonderful word-play. Very judicious use of 44 words! 🙂
Thank you.
LOVE the title…..and its play on words here. And then the comparison of the quick sweet pecks to commas….delightful!
Thank you Lillian. It seems that comparison has gone down a storm.
Nice lines: “more time consuming,
all consuming”
Kissing
Anchors
Bliss
Oh the
Ocean Tides…
Sensual poem, Carol. Love it!